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All the Colours of the Me ([personal profile] rainbow) wrote in [site community profile] dw_docs2009-04-17 06:44 pm

Help with phrasing, please?

This one is sticking me. I'd love a suggestion on how to take out the "see".

"Who can see that you've marked this entry as memorable?
Everyone, only people on your Access List, or just you?"

Edited, because I hadn't realised not having the second sentence would make such a difference in answers. Mea culpa!

What about
"Who has access to this memory:
Everyone, only people on your Access List, only yourself?"

[personal profile] nightprincess 2009-04-18 03:04 am (UTC)(link)
The problem with "Who has access to this memory?" is that "memory" by itself is vague: it can be the original article itself, or it can be the article's link in the memorable entries list.

My attempt...

"Who can find this entry in your memory list: everyone, only people on your access list, or just you?"
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[personal profile] sophie 2009-04-18 08:40 am (UTC)(link)
I like this best, personally.

[edited to add: Not a member of the docs team, though.]
Edited 2009-04-18 08:41 (UTC)